6年级英语作文范文

6 年级英语作文范文

篇一：小学英语作文范文 ( 必背 )

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7 、Jack 昨天跟他妈妈买东西，请依据下表的信息，写一篇许多于

60 个单

paper

词的小作文。 Happy Shop：Somepieces of candy

￥4 A roll of toilet

￥ 5

Mr. Chen ’ s Store ： A carton of ice cream ￥ 15

Uncle Eddy

’s Store ：A bottle of shampoo

：A bag of chips

￥ 45 A pair of socks

￥9 Toy car

￥ 105

￥ 8

Big Blue Department Store Yesterday

was Jack ’s shopping day. He went shopping with his mother.

’s 105 yuan. They were very happy.

. They bought a toy car. It

8 、假定你是 May, 请用许多于 60 个单词来向你的笔友 Jay 介绍你的家庭状况，请在文中使用 3 个最高等和 2 个比较级。

Hi, Jay,

I ’m very happy to be your pen-friends. I have a warm family. There are four people in my family. My father is the tallest and the oldest in

my family. My mother is

beautiful. She is a teacher. She is thinner than my father. I am a

student. I am three years older than my sister. My sister is the youngest in my family. I love my family. What about you?

Bye bye,

May

9 、依据提示，从表格中获守信息写一篇许多于

60 个单词的小作文，要求

提示的内容要所有表此刻作文中。

My Friends

I have two good friends. They

’re Zhang Ping and Jim. Zhang Ping is

12. Jim is three

years older than her. He’ s 15. Jim is heavier than Zhang

than her. He’s 162cm. Zhang Ping

Ping. He’ s 60 kilograms. Jim is taller

is a Chinese girl. She lives in Xinhui. Jim is a Canadian boy. He lives

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in Guangzhou now. Zhang Ping likes

red. Her favorite sport is badminton.

Jim likes blue. His favorite sport is swimming. I like them very much.

10 、描绘你的周末生活，注意用一般此刻时。

My Weekend

I have happy weekend.

On Saturday morning I always have English

classes at school. I study

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draw pictures. Sometimes I visit my grandmother and grandfather.

Sometimes I listen to

music. On Sunday afternoon I often do housework or

go shopping.

So I love weekends.

11 、昨天是 3 月 20 日，也是你的诞辰，请描绘你的诞辰派对，注意用一般过去时。

My birthday

Yesterday was March 20th. It was my birthday. I had a party. I ate

too much. Mike brought a carton of ice cream. Jenny brought some candy.

Mary brought a lot of

cookies. My mom made a cake. My dad bought a toy car for me. I was very happy. At the party we sang and danced. We had a good time.

12 、写一个你最喜爱的人，请对他 / 她进行必定的相貌描绘。

My Favorite People

Who is your favorite people? My favorite people is my mother. She

is beautiful. She is 38 years old. She is tall and thin. She has big eyes and long hair. She likes cooking. She cooks good meals for us every day.

And she always does all the housework. She looks after my father and me.

I love my mother very much.

13 、请描绘一下你的房间，注意要使用“

there be ”句型。

My Bedroom

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I have a nice and small bedroom. There is a beautiful bed and two

small chair. I also have a big and tall closet because I have manyclothes. There is a big desk next to the window. I always do my homework at the

desk. There is a family photo on the wall. Wetook this photo this summer holiday. I like my bedroom.

14 、请以你所在的学校“育英小学”描绘你的学校。

My School

I study at Yuying Primary School. My school is very big and beautiful.

There are three buildings and a playground. There are many trees and flowers. My classroom is very big and bright. There are 60 students in

it. They study hard and always help with each other. Our teachers are very nice and smart. I like my school.

15 、依据下边供给的信息，写一篇 60 字左右的作文。

Name ：Bill

Favorite sports: tennis, soccer, basketball

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Clothes: black, T-shirt, blue pants

Age: 13

Phone number: 5352375

My Friend

I have a good friend. We are in the same class. His name is Bill.

He is 13. He likes sports very much. These sports are tennis, soccer and basketball. He plays tennis twice a week. He plays soccer twice a week.

He plays basketball once a week. He often likes to wear black T-shirt and blue pants. His phone number is 5352375. Everyone likes him.

16 、请写一个你最喜爱的季节，要写出你喜爱的原由。

My favorite season

My favorite

season is summer. It ’ s hot in summer. There is a summer

vacation in summer. I don’t go to school. I think manychildren like this

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season, because they can eat ice-cream and go swimming. I can go swimming. Sometimes I go to the beach with my parents. Sometimes I go to the swimming pool with my friends. I usually visit many places in summer vacation.

17 、描绘一种你最喜爱的动物，要对它进行外形描绘。

My Favorite Animal

My favorite

animal is rabbit. Its nameis Sweet. Sweet has long ears.

It ’s very small. It

’s white. It has a short tail. It has red eyes. It

likes eating carrots.

It likes jumping. It goes jumping three times a day.

I like it very much. It ’s lovely.

It ’s my best friend.

I like the rabbit.

18 、同学们，你必定有好多的喜好，请你写一个你的喜好，字数许多于 60

个单词。

My hobby

My hobby is collecting stamps （集邮） . There are many stamps in my room. I like stamps very much. There are many things on the stamps. They are colorful and

beautiful. After school I usually go to the post office and there are many people there. I learn a lot from collecting stamps. I like collecting stamps very much.

19 、寒假很快就要到了，请你为你的寒假写一个计划。快点把你的计划写出来吧！

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篇二：六年级英语作文范文集 _4

六年级英语作文范文集

班别： 姓名：学号：

morning. He is going to go to the zoo this Saturday afternoon. He

is going to buy a book this Sunday morning. He is going to learn Kungfu

this Sunday afternoon. He is going to watch TV this Sunday evening. 2

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看图写作文。（园地 29 页） 题目： A Happy Day in Spring

提示：下列图是

Mr. Black 一家人在春季的某一天在野外游乐的场景。请用4

一般此刻时描绘图中所表现出的内容。可作适合的想象和发挥。

要求： 1、条理清楚，意思明确、连接，句子通畅，标点正确，书写工整、

规范。 2 、许多于 70 个单词。

A Happy Day in Spring

It

’s spring. It ’ s sunny and cloudy today. There are many big trees

They bring many

in the park. Mr. Black ’s family have a picnic in a park.

food there. They bring fruit, drink and bread. Mr. Black and Mrs. Black talk with each other. They talk very happily. Ann reads a magazine. Tom likes flying a kite. The kite flies very well. They are hungry now. They want to eat their food. They are very happy.

3 、依据下边供给的内容，写一篇英语短文。要求语句通畅，条理清楚，字数许多于 50 个单词。

Mary

是个英国女孩，五年级学生，十二岁。她向他人自我介绍，并介绍她

的家庭。她有个双胞胎姐姐，爸爸是医生，妈妈是老师，她特别爱他们，他们也 很爱她。

My name is Mary. I come from England. I am an English girl. I am a

student. I am in Grade Five. I like

my teacher. Her English is good. There

My father is a doctor.

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are four people in my family.

I have a twin sister.

My mother is a teacher. I love them very much. They love me, too. 4 题目： My net friend

（我的网友）

要求： 1。条理清楚，意思连接，语句通畅，标点正确，书写清楚、规范；

2．要将提示词所有表此刻作文中； 不得少于 50 个单词。 提示词：（ 1）computer

（ 2） net friend (3) talk with each other(

相互谈话 )

(4) in the chat room (

在聊天室 ) （5）talk in English ( 用英语谈话 )

（ 6） good now

My net friend

I am Tony. I a have a computer. I have a net friend. His nameis Jack. He is

12 years old. He is a student. He likes surfing the net. We often

talk with each other in the chat room. We talk in English. My English is

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good now. He is a good boy. I like him very much. Do you want to have a

net friend?

5 、提示：依据下边所给出的这张 Ann的乳名片，以“我的好朋友”为题，写一篇小短文，介绍 Ann 的基本状况。 要求： 1、条理清楚，意思连接，语句通畅，标点正确，书写清楚、规范。

2 、要将名片中的内容所有表此刻作文中。

3 、许多于 60 个单词。

I

have a good friend. Her nameis Ann. Her Chinese nameis WangXiaolan.

is a doctor and her mother

She is from England. She is in Beijing Her father is a nurse. Her brother is five years old.

She likes dancing, singing and

watching TV. She is friendly and she likes to help others. What a good girl!

6 、短文写作。依据给出的提示和要求，写一篇

65 个单词左右的英语短文。

要求： 1、写一封介绍你一家的电子邮件给 Jay Hello, Jay,

I am very happy to be your net friend. There are four people in my family. They are my parents , my sister and I. My father is the oldest

and the tallest. He can drive a car. He is a doctor. My mother is a factory worker. She works hard. My

sister is a student. She is the best in her class. My hobby is playing basketball. My sister and I go to school on foot. I have a happy family. What about you?Bye- bye ， Benson

7 、Jack 昨天跟他妈妈买东西，请依据下表的信息，写一篇许多于

60 个单

paper

词的小作文。 Happy Shop：Somepieces of candy

￥4 A roll of toilet ￥15

￥ 5 Mr. Chen ’ s Store ：A carton of ice cream

Uncle

Eddy’s Store ： A bottle of shampoo￥ 45 A pair of socks ￥ 8 Big

￥ 9 Toy car ￥105

Blue Department Store ：A bag of chips

Yesterday

was Jack ’s shopping day. He went shopping with his mother.

paper. They bought a carton of ice cream at happy.

8 、假定你是 May, 请用许多于 60 个单词来向你的笔友 Jay 介绍你的家庭情

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况，请在文中使用 3 个最高等和 2 个比较级。 Hi, Jay,

I

’m very happy to be your pen-friends. I have a warm family. There

are four people in my family. My father is the tallest and the oldest in my family. My mother is beautiful. She is a teacher. She is thinner than my father. I am a student. I amthree years older than my sister.

My sister

is the youngest in my family. I love my family. What about you? Bye bye,

May

9 、依据提示，从表格中获守信息写一篇许多于

60 个单词的小作文，要求

提示的内容要所有表此刻作文中。

M

My Friends

I have two good friends. They

’re Zhang Ping and Jim. Zhang Ping is

12. Jim is three years older than her. He’ s 15. Jim is heavier than Zhang Ping. He’ s 60 kilograms. Jim is taller

than her. He’s 162cm. Zhang Ping

is a Chinese girl. She lives in Xinhui. Jim is a Canadian boy. He lives in Guangzhou now. Zhang Ping likes

red. Her favorite sport is badminton.

Jim likes blue. His favorite sport is swimming. I like them very much. 10、描绘你的周末生活，注意用一般此刻时。

My Weekend

I have happy weekend.

On Saturday morning I always have English

classes at school. I study

hard in the classroom. In the afternoon I often play computer games. On Sunday morning I often draw pictures. Sometimes I visit my grandmother

and grandfather.

Sometimes I listen to music. On Sunday afternoon I often

do housework or go shopping.

So I love weekends.

11 、昨天是 3 月 20 日，也是你的诞辰，请描绘你的诞辰派对，注意用一般过去时。

My birthday

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Yesterday was March 20th. It was my birthday. I had a party. I ate

too much. Mike brought a carton of ice cream. Jenny brought some candy. Mary brought a lot of cookies. My mom made a cake. My dad bought a toy car for me. I was very happy. At the party we sang and danced. We had a good time. 12 、写一个你最喜爱的人，请对他 / 她进行必定的相貌描绘。

My Favorite People

Who is your favorite people? My favorite people is my mother. She

is beautiful.

She is 38 years old. She is tall and thin. She has big eyes

and long hair. She likes cooking. She cooks good meals for us every day. And she always does all the housework. She looks after my father and me.

I love my mother very much.

13 、请描绘一下你的房间，注意要使用“

there be ”句型。

My Bedroom

I have a nice and small bedroom. There is a beautiful bed and two

small chair. I also have a big and tall

closet because I have manyclothes.

There is a big desk next to the window. I always do my homework at the desk. There is a family photo on the wall.

Wetook this photo this summer

holiday. I like my bedroom. 14

、请以你所在的学校“育英小学”描绘你的学

校。

My School

I study at Yuying Primary School. My school is very big and beautiful.

There are three buildings and a playground. There are many trees and flowers. My classroom is very big and bright. There are 60 students in

it. They study hard and always help with each other. Our teachers are very

nice and smart. I like my school.

I have a good friend. We are in the same class. His name is Bill.

He is 13. He likes sports very much. These sports are tennis, soccer and basketball. He plays tennis twice a week. He plays soccer twice a week.

He plays basketball once a week. He often likes to wear black T-shirt and

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blue pants. His phone number is 5352375. Everyone likes him. 16

、请写

一个你最喜爱的季节，要写出你喜爱的原由。

My favorite season

My favorite

season is summer. It ’ s hot in summer. There is a summer

vacation in summer. I don’t go to school.

I think manychildren like this

season, because they can eat ice-cream and go swimming. I can go swimming. Sometimes I go to the beach with my parents.

Sometimes I go to the swimming

pool with my friends. I usually visit many places in summer vacation.

17 、描绘一种你最喜爱的动物，要对它进行外形描绘。

My Favorite Animal

My favorite

animal is rabbit. Its nameis Sweet. Sweet has long ears.

It ’s very small. It

’s white. It has a short tail. It has red eyes. It

It likes jumping. It goes jumping three times a day.

It ’s my best friend.

I like the rabbit.

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likes eating carrots.

I like it very much. It ’s lovely.

18 、同学们，你必定有好多的喜好，请你写一个你的喜好，字数许多于 个单词。

My hobby

My hobby is collecting stamps （集邮） . There are many stamps in my room. I like stamps very much. There are many things on the stamps. They

are colorful and beautiful. After school I usually go to the post office and there are many people there. I learn a lot from collecting stamps. I like collecting stamps very much.

19 、寒假很快就要到了，请你为你的寒假写一个计划。快点把你的计划写出来吧！

My Winter Holiday It ’sThailand. It

’ s spicy and tasty. In the winter holiday, I

20 、假 设 Jack 是 10 岁 , 短发 ,1.5m, 50kg; 而 May 是

发 ,1.6m,45kg 。请运用学过的句型介绍和比较一下他们的特色。

12 岁,长

Jack and May

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I have two good friends. They are Jack and May. He is ten. He has

short hair. He is 50kg now. And May is a beautiful girl.

She has long hair.

Jack.

She is two years older

than Jack. She is 12 now. She is taller than

She is 1.6m. But Jack is heavier than May. May is 45kg. They are lovely students. I like them.

篇三：小学五、六年级英语作文典范

小学英语五年级上册各单元作文典范及评论

My English Teacher

Miss

Tang is my English teacher. She’ s very pretty. She is tall and

thin. She has two big eyes and a small mouth. Her hair is long. She likes

cats very much. And she likes singing and dancing, too. Her English is very good. We often play games in English classes. She is very kind to us. We all love her.

【要领评论】

这篇作文的题目是“我的英语老师”，是一篇介绍人物的作文。小作者开

门见山，直接点题，第一介绍了英语老师的姓名， 而后逐个介绍了她的相貌特色、

喜好、英语水平、上课特色以及师生感情等。 小朋友们在写作文时，要注意使用自己最熟习的词 [ 组 ] ，免得写出一些错句子。 写作时要注意意思连接、 语句通畅、标点正确、书写清楚、规范等。

My Days of the week

I ’m a student and I am in Grade 5.I get up at six o

’clock every

’

day. I have breakfast at half past six, and go to school at seven o

clock. I have classes from Monday to Saturday. I have an English class

on Friday and I

have a PE class on Tuesday. I don ’t have to go to school

on school, and I like to go swimming on that day.

【要领评论】

这篇作文的题目是“我的一周”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是从自己的

亲身经历写起，表达了自己一周七天的所作所为，并特别重申了礼拜天的喜好，

写得自然、流利。

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小朋友们写作文时要注意人称及谓语动词的变化，要依照提示，联合自己

的实质，写自己身旁熟习的事情。

My Favourite Food

Do you know what this is? Guess! Its colour is yellow. It

’s long

and thin. It looks like a small boat and crescent. Oh, it is a banana.

Do you know what that is? Guess again! Its colour is orange. It ’ s round.

It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is an orange. I

like then a lot. I like ice-creams. I like to chew gum. Chocolates and

candies are yummy. I like them very much.

How about you? What

’s your favourite food?

【要领评论】

My Favourite Food

是一篇很成功的文章，小作者其实不是简单地列举出自

己最喜爱的每一种食品， 而是有详有略地进行介绍。 整篇文章用词正确、 语言流 畅、没有语法错误。 此外，文章中出现了一些生词， 可见小作者是专心查词典了。

I can help do housework

I am a girl. My name is Li Ling. I

’ m in Class Three, Grade Five.

I ’mhelpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep

the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?

【要领评论】

本篇作文的题目是“我能够帮助做家务”，作者主要表达自己在家帮助做

的事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详尽，到位。

小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲身经历的事情，这样会防止在作文时

显得太空，因为只有自己常常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。

写作时还要注意大小

写和时态。

In The Kitchen

This

is the kitchen of my family. It ’ s big and nice. Look! My mother There is a big

is cooking in it. table

here.

This is a microwave and that is a stove.

on it.

There are many things What are these? They look yummy!

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Oh, they ’re strawberries. And what are those? They are grapes.

【要领评论】

这篇作文的题目是“在厨房”里，作者依据自己家的厨房状况。介绍厨房

里有微波炉和电炉， 有一张大桌子和桌子上的物件等， 以及妈妈在做饭， 特别真

实。

小朋友们，能够从察看自己身旁的事、物写起，利用所学的句子，描述身

边熟习的东西来训练习作。

My Village

My village is very beautiful. There are many houses in the village.

Near the village, there is a forest. A small river is in front of the

village.

The water in it is very clean. Wecan see some fish in the river.

Near the river,

you can see a mountain. Someflowers and grass are on the

mountain. I like my village. Welcome to my village!

【要领评论】

本文以“我的乡村”为题描述了自己家乡的风景。介绍了乡村的房子、森

林、河流及大山， 令人看了这篇作文后的确感觉到“我的乡村”的漂亮。

小朋友

们在写作时，可认真想一下自己的乡村或所在城市的特色，

尽量使用本单元学过

的单词或短语进行表达。

小学英语五年级下册各单元作文典范及评论

My weekend

There

are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday,

I often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do somecleaning.

On Sunday, I always in the afternoon.

visit my grandparents in the morning and do somereading

After dinner, I often watch TV with my parents. At that time, we can talk with each other and say something happily. We often have a good time.

【要领评论】

写法：这篇习作是依照时间次序记述周末的活动，记述了周六和周日的上

午和下午分别做了哪些活动及对活动的感觉。即：周六上午：舞蹈课→下午：做

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作业和帮妈妈做洁净→周日上午：探望祖父亲母亲→下午：阅读→夜晚：看电视，与父亲母亲沟通→感觉： 快乐和快乐。我们还能够选用周六和周日中的几个比较主要的

活动来写，先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事， 有什么感觉。 再依照活动次序把活动内容写清楚，最后抒发一下对此次活动或这个周末的感想。

时态：这篇短文我们能够用三种时态来写 : a. 一般过去时（主要描述你上个周末是如何度过的） ;b. 一般此刻时 （主要描述你常常如何度过周末） ;c. 一般未来时（主要描述你要如何过周末） 。这里我们来表述平常是如何过周末的，所以采纳一般此刻时来写。

注意：活动的有关表达方法可采纳旧知识，

eg. （例）起床 get up，和新知

识， eg. Climb mountains 去登山中的 un 很简单错写成 nu。还要注意不要出现

”不要写成 “I often with 之间。

病句， eg. “I often watch TV with my parents. my parents watch TV .

” 词量上控制在 50 ~ 80

We have four seasons in a year. I can do many interesting things in each season. In spring, it ’s wind. And I

the weather

is cool and wind, I can fly kites when

can go hiking with my family when it ’s sunny and cool.

’ s not long

I like hiking. Summer is hot in the north of China, but it

time. I often go swimming. It can make me healthy and strong. I can also wear my beautiful dresses. Fall is a season with harvest. And I can eat delicious fruits it ’s often snowy

in this season. I can watch the in winter in my

leaves fall. Winter comes,

hometown. When it snows, everything is

white. Wecan play with

snow and make a snowman, skate and ski. And winter

is my favourite season, because of the Spring Festival. I love seasons. I love the nature.

【要领评论】

写法：这篇短文是描述“我的四时”，在写法上，是依据春、夏、秋、冬

四时的更替来写的， 先讲明每个季节的特色， 以后再写在这个季节中的主要活动

或比较有代表性的活动。 同时讲一些自己的真切感觉， 最后论述自己最喜爱的季

节。在实质的写作的时候我们还能够先写出自己喜爱的季节及主要的活动内容，

以后再去讲其余几个季节， 还能够多解说一下地区的季节特色和大自然中的其余

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风景，如：秋季的田地里一片金黄，农民在收割等等，这样写出来的四时更切近

实质。

时态：这篇习作讲的是“我的四时”，是比较惯常的一些行为，所以我们

最好采纳一般此刻时和神态动词联合活动的写法。即：在什么季节，天气如何，

我们能够做什么。

注意：在写作内容上，不可以够像过去的内容那么简单，因为有四个季节，

所以要写明季节，季节天气，季节性活动，活动的人，活动的感觉等，要求句子

次序要正确， 在写作中还要注意关系词的使用， 如用了“因为”， 就不可以用“所

以”，两者不可以够同时出现。词量要控制在 80 个词之内。

My Birthday Party

Every year, when it ’s birthday, my parents hold a party for me. They invite my friend to come to my house to celebrate my birthday. I can get many beautiful gifts every year. In my party, we can do many things:

1. Light the candles.

2. Sing a“Happy Birthday ” song. 3. Make a wish. 4. Blow out the candles. 5. Cut off the cake. 6. Eat the cake. 7. Open the presents. 8. Sing and dance.

9. Watch videos or play other games. 10. Say goodbye with each other.

That ’s my birthday party, is it interesting?

【要领评论】

写法：这篇习作是按活动的次序来写的，记述了诞辰晚会的各项详细活动，

比较全面。比较从前几个单元的写作写法，这个短文按活动次序比较适合。

时态：这篇短文能够用三种时态来写：

1 、一般未来时：主要说明诞辰晚会份的各项计划，都将如何进行。

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2 、一般此刻时：主要说明习惯上如何度过每个诞辰。 3 、一般过去时：主要说明你的诞辰晚会是如何进行的。 句型： invite sb. to do sth.

邀请某人做某事

注意：因为这篇短文很有性，所表达的大概上都基真同样，所以在书

写的时候要注意联合自己的实质活动与真情实感去写。 此外注意一些短语和单词

的书写不要发生错误：

There are five people in my family. They are my grandma, grandpa,

dad, mom and I. Look! Grandma is watching TV. Grandpa is reading a book.

Dad is writing an e-mail. Mom is cooking dinner. I am doing my homework.

I love my family!

【要领评论】

写法：这篇习作介绍了自己家的家庭成员，以及此刻他们正在干什么，表

达了自己对家人的感情。 时态：因为本单元主要讲的是此刻进行时态，所以建

议采纳此刻进行时态。

句型：主语 +be+动词的此刻分词。

注意：本单元的要点是此刻进行时态，注意在写句子时要保持时态的完好

性，即系动词和动词的 ing 缺一不行。

In the park

It is sunny

today .My mother, my father and I are going to the park.

We like the park very much. It is very big and beautiful .There are many trees and flowers in it. Many people like to go there. Look! An old man

is sitting on the chair. He is reading a book carefully. Two boys are

jumping on the ground. Their mothers are talking

with each other. Twobirds

are flying

in the sky. The ducks are swimming in the river. They are very

’ s a

happy. What is the cat doing? Oh, it is running after a mouse. It poor mouse.

【要领评论】

写法：这篇习作是用此刻进行时描述出公园里的人和动物们正在进行的活

动还运用了一般此刻时表达了公园漂亮的风景。

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时态：这篇文章能够采纳一般此刻时和此刻进行时两种时态，因为本单元

的语法项目是此刻进行时，所以，描述的要点要放在此刻进行时态上。

句型：一般此刻时：主语 +谓语 +其余

此刻进行时：（ 1） What +be (am,is ,are)+ 主语 +v.-ing+ 其余 ?

（ 2）主语 +be(am,is ,are)+ v.-ing+

其余。

A Field Trip

It is a nice day. Our class will have a field trip today. The

classmates are very excited. Look! Here we are. There

’ re a lot of

activities to do. Amy is watching insects. Peter is collecting leaves.

They want to write

a report. Mandy is catching butterflies in the woods.

Tim and Bob are playing chess. Someof the classmates are having a picnic. There is a lot of delicious food to eat. Oh, who

’ s that over there? It ’

s Miss White. What is she doing? She is taking photos. Wehad a very good time. I ’ll never forget this field trip.

【要领评论】

写法：这篇习作是依照郊游时的画面来描述的，记述了同学们分别在郊游中做了哪些活动及郊游的感觉。 时态：这篇文章能够用一般过去时和此刻进行时来写。因为本单元主要讲的是此刻进行时， 所以，这里我们采纳此刻进行时比较适合。

句型：×× . is/are doing sth. She /He is doing sth. They

’re doing

sth.

注意：活动的有关表述法采纳新旧知知趣联合去写。注意时态的变换、描绘感觉时用一般此刻时。

PEP 小学英语六年级上册各单元作文典范及评论

Li Ying

’ S Hobby

Li Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening.

Does she like dancing? No, she doesn ’ t. But she likes drawing and

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singing. Her parents love her. And

all the teachers and her friends like

her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy.

【要领评论】

这一篇写喜好的文章 , 小作者的写作思路很值得我们学习 , 他没有详细写到刘莹的某一种喜好 , 而是从学习到课余的多种喜好下手 , 对刘莹的各样喜好进行了粗线条地勾勒 . 从“喜好”这个角度来看刘莹的话，我们会感觉这个形象很饱

满。

小朋友们写这类“叙事写人”作文时，能够从两个角度下手：一是详细地

描述；二是和上边小朋友同样，粗线条地勾勒，两者各有千秋，另处内行文中使

用一些问句，使用一些转述的话， 能够使作文更有灵气， 防止了平淡无奇的弊端。

比方上文的“ Does she like dancing? No, she doesn

’t. ”和“ she says her

hobbies make her happy. ”就是十分不错的句子，使读者眼前为之一亮。

Don ’ t be against the traffic rules

I go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school by bike at 7:30

in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red

or yellow,I know I can

’t cross the road ,so I wait.

“Go”, and then I walk

If the light turns green, I know it means

across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules.

【要领评论】

这篇作文的题目是“不要违犯交通规则”，小作者没有说一些空话，而是

从自己的经历写起， 表达自己以什么方式去上学， 在上学的路上是怎么做的， 很

形象。

小朋友们在作文时注意不要图大，那样很简单使文章显得空洞，而要写自

己身旁熟习的事情。要注意行文中字母的大小写、句子的标点符号等。

I Love My Family

Here is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family.

They are my father, my mother, my brother and I.

My father is a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to

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work by subway. My mother is a teacher.

She works in a school near my home.

reading books. Whois the

She goes to work by bike. After work, they like

tall boy? He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. He’s now in Beijing. He goes there by plane.

I love my family.

【要领评论】

一个平庸的题材，一篇生动的作文。这样的命题，我们可能面对几次，甚

至几十次了。 但这位小朋友的笔端特别灵便， 了了数言， 让一个幸福的家庭跃然

纸上，很值得我们去思虑，我们能做到吗？

小朋友的这篇作文除了语言优美之

外，在构造上也有闪光之处。先总说，将自己的家人逐个介绍一遍，后分说，把 家人的工作、上班方式，喜好一一细说。最后以一句话进行归纳，起到点题的作

用。我们在写近似的作文的时候是否是也能够借鉴呢？

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